The Rainbow- Prose Passage Blog Post #20

         Lindsay Mccalmont graded by essay and awarded it a 6. With the rubric in mind, Lindsay said she believed that my essay scored a high 6  because my writing provided a "sustained, competent reading of the passage" and "a reasonable analysis" of the prose passage. She said believed that I had good control on my writing and was very consistent on characterizing the woman's situation. I also "referred to the text for support" of my claims. What I could have improved on in my essay was introducing more literary devices in my thesis and ones that supported the woman's position more. Lindsay said she thought that I focused more on the woman's situation and feelings than on the literary devices and although I didn't list them all in my thesis I did however try to include others throughout my essay. I was surprised Lindsay awarded me a 6 because I wasn't as confident with my interpretation and literary devices. After reading the rubric and discussing the essay in class, I feel like I was on the right track but there was a lot of things that I missed in the passage and did not address, like some essential devices.

        While reading the passage, I noticed that the word "know" was repeated multiple times as well as references to knowledge or questioning  I attempted at including this in my writing but I wasn't sure how to interpret it as well as how we talked about later in class. We also discussed more about how knowledge supported the woman's position and her feelings towards it, which led to out introduction into self-self-assertation. I had about this pyramid a bit but never would have thought to relate it to the passage. Now I think that I could have used this complexity to better elaborate on some of the ideas that I started to propose in my body paragraph and many people could have related better to the passage and my thesis. 

          Looking back on what I wrote and from our class discussion, I realize that there were some better literary devices that I could have identified and explained, some even crucial to the passage. One of the devices that I brought up was parallelism which I think was solid but I could have been more specific as to what kind of  parallelism was used. I also think there was more than one parallelism which I could have alluded to to strengthen my thesis better. In my essay, I also said that the contrast from a man and a woman as a kind of imagery. I never really included contrast in my thesis but it I did mention it later in my essay. With the pressure of time I feel like I may have somewhat ignored the importance the complexity of the passage and couldn't really find a way to form a concise thesis about it. I think in the future I should do a better job at "working the prompt" to help me lead myself to a better conclusion of the passage's importance.

         A literary device I did mention correctly was repetition. Lawrence used a lot of repetition between the words knowledge and blood, or reference to these two words. He used this to emphasize the woman's dissatisfaction of her position and her desire to know how she got here and how she could get out of it. I think repetition is a great literary device that is easy to point out but it is hard to find the complexity accomplished by using the device. I feel like I lacked in that a little but am ready to improve on that. Overall, I believe that I had the right general idea in my essay but could have incorporated some more important literary devices that I noticed into my writing to support my thesis better and answer all of the prompt and not only part of it.